original: golf is a mind game that takes skill. i love playing and i would play it everyday but im too busy. its relaxing. in the fall like right now there isnt a lot of people. you can look around and see everything and its pretty and calm. its better to get lower scores. each hole has a par. par is how many shots it usually takes to make it in.
revised: This is what golf is like. Its a mind game you play and it takes skill. I love to play this sport. I would play it every day if I could and wasn't so busy. Its very relaxing and in the fall, like right now, when there isn't many people out there and you can look around and see everything, its really pretty and calm. Its better to get lower scores, and each hole has a par. Par means how many shots it should take you to put it in.
this is part of my "golf" writing that i used for a finally choice writing. at first it wasn't very good. i fixed it and had someone look at it and help me fix it. i wrote about gold because its my favorite sport. i just wrote about some random stuff about it and made it look good.
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